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Hands of Words sans Images by ~Coidzy:iconCoidzy:



Do you know, my artsy girl,
What makes a man’s face
Worth the remembering?
A woman memorable?
Dazzling?


Curse these hands which have never wrought
Any shape out of fine line and form
Worth the effort of looking,
For how could they ever hope to do justice
To what mine eyes beheld here,

O! Would I render this Beautiful Frame I see
No option but to carve it in truth unwithering,
Using tools granted unto this world –
With ink, stone, the earth itself
How I would paint thee until your eyes were more than alive,
(More humanity shown than in human is grown)
And indeed, you stepped, nay, leaped out of the canvas,
Tearing the heart from mortal man.
(And if I’m good, woman too)

That I could render your Self, statuesque,
Put Pygmalion, Venus, to shame,
Not just Life and Beauty,
Will fill this homage,
But I shall show the Truth
That lies within the Eye,
And a Soul to honor your own

If I could work in song, hitting upon the minstrel’s art,
Passion to steal away Reason,
With such music of emotion, none could tell
How your electric sex picked me out
And filled with ink, a wicked fast pen

Would that I were not plagued by this curse,
Desire to show the unshowable
Through words, express the inexpressible
In visions bestowed upon the sight of mind

To try to show beauty with words alone,
Is meaningless and trite,
Not to mention it’s never won to poets, Rights
To sit and talk and drink in his subject in seclusion

And the fruits of my hand, to bring forth the vision of my mind
Fail, again and again in the task I give,
Whether by paragraph or photograph
Sketch or sculpture, stanza, song
Even as I strive to the thousandth generation,
Still these visions remain locked inside,
Toothless to infect and spread

Too bad I got excited, eh?
Thought it might work,
When I heard that whispered promise
That you had a key.

Only more empty words did you bring
Out of the wellspring, the Inner Me

Do you know, my artista,
What makes a man’s face
Worth the remembering?
A woman memorably
Dazzling?
©2007-2009 ~Coidzy
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Author's Comments

Something I wrote up when I was cursing my lack of an ability to even draw a simple heart that didn't suck. I'm guessing this was first scrawled at the end of my senior year in high school and I polished it up some (still don't like the italicized sections as much as I should though) about a week before I went off to college.

10-23-07. Editted, Expanded, and possibly even Refined the piece's thrust. Either that or I've gone in a completely different direction.

Revision is, after all, the better part of writing...

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:iconkoshibunni:
I stumbled a bit when I was reading it, but maybe it was because I was trying to speed through it, I liked the imagery evoked and feel your frustration through it, but I still really liked it.

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:iconposhu:
hmm.... interesting.... for Jessica? for randomness? for shame?

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:iconsamaji:
Wow! Awesome! Got passion, that one!
:iconhark-the-raven:
mm, i must say i like this'un. p'raps because of the bit of the poetic olde english sprinkled in there, but i do enjoy it. more than that, i relate to it, which is the goal of all writers, to have people relate to their work.

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:iconcoidzy:
Mainly shame and my inferiority complex I obtained from never having the sort of... creative instinct for drawing or making things that my brothers did, so I've pretty much always wished I could envision things and create them since I was maybe 6 or 8.

Which is why I love to watch people as they draw or sketch... and yet also feel a slight anguish at the same time. My psyche is a bit confused on this issue.....

That probably gives you the underlying impetus but as for the specifics I've divorced them from me so I must reflect awhile....

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:iconposhu:
but you can make things with words... like no one I have ever encountered...

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The man who smiles when things go wrong has thought of someone to blame it on.

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:iconcoidzy:
True... I might have just thrown a monkey wrench into the meaning though, so a fresh set of eyes to check up on that would be appreciated.

It is a rather annoying thing, either seeing your efforts fall flat on their face and barely even "look pretty" while doing it...

Probably though, one of the deepest rifts/thingies/issues/questions/themes/undercurrents that I just keep coming back to, within my creative self is my jealousy of the visual arts and especially in regards to my brothers who have had much more success there.

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Maybe... I always get the feeling that a lot of this wonder that I see in people is because those who make the effort in the first place to 'write' (for example, say, "authors" of fanfiction) don't actually try to grasp what they do or even truly try to write so much as get their personal angst or perverse sexual fantasies outside of themselves. But the thing you have to do when you're really trying for the writer's ...knack... is to reach out to the reader and if possible, reach within them to their soul.

Wherein lies the danger of truly reading... (I guess you could say I use truly in a philosophical/metaphysical sense), because if you let the writer reach inside of you, sometimes they'll tear you apart, but generally, and fortunately too, this only happens when they mean to give you some cathartic release to pull you back together...

But it has always been this nagging thing about my creative self... I can see this very vivid things inside my mind's eye, and yet I cannot truly communicate what I see save through a physical image of some sort.... and I have for some reason never been able to become connected with the visual arts, and indeed, every time I have tried my inherent human motor skills get in my way to the point where it vexes me.

In short I really need to take some dedicated time to take some art courses.

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I will ask you though... what you mean by that, since what you say does not necessarily a good thing mean, so I would hear more of what you mean specifically. What have I done that is so new to you?

and thank you.

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